22-07-2008, 10:07 AM
Before my school holidays, which recently ended, we were asked to write a short report like story about what we do when we arrive at school. Now, we get a school newsletter, about monthly, and some children's stories are put into it. So you probably suspect, mine was.
I had written this story, glad and proud of myself, as I love to write, but something was different. My story had mostly changed! Unfair much?
The secretaries or my teacher went along and changed most of my story, as if it wasn't good enough. They like the base of it, but then go and change sentences. I'll show you one of the changes:
Mine: "There we wait, patiently in line, standing as still as statues, as we wait for a teacher to begin assembly."
Now: "There we wait, still as the calmness before a great storm."
No offence school, but:
1. I gave you no permission to edit, or change my story in any way.
2. You made it sound as if I was a book-worm, who observes the way the weather changes, and what-not.
3. Nothing was wrong with my story before hand. Everyone who read it, liked it.
What do you think, as i'm very disappointed in them.
I had written this story, glad and proud of myself, as I love to write, but something was different. My story had mostly changed! Unfair much?
The secretaries or my teacher went along and changed most of my story, as if it wasn't good enough. They like the base of it, but then go and change sentences. I'll show you one of the changes:
Mine: "There we wait, patiently in line, standing as still as statues, as we wait for a teacher to begin assembly."
Now: "There we wait, still as the calmness before a great storm."
No offence school, but:
1. I gave you no permission to edit, or change my story in any way.
2. You made it sound as if I was a book-worm, who observes the way the weather changes, and what-not.
3. Nothing was wrong with my story before hand. Everyone who read it, liked it.
What do you think, as i'm very disappointed in them.