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[align=center][size=8pt]The email systems at college arn't working, so I'm posting this here until I can get home.
Plus, I want your opinion, is this Dramatic Monologue okay?
Please no harsh critism [sp] because I'm the furthest thing from an English teacher.

PLEASE LOCK THIS, I'VE SENT THIS HOME AND EDITED IT NOW ^-^

Wow! thats just so well written!! Go Nichola!! {clap}

Aw thankyou ^-^
I'm gonna have to finish it tonight, Its due in tomorrow D:
x

Well done, that's brilliant!
Just one piece of constructive criticism:
Maria states: " don’t worry, it grew on him." about the father, yet he walks out the door bitterly, with no evidence of it 'growing on' him.
Other than that, it was perfect, ace, spot on.

Ah thankyou.
I'm planning on doing it badly anyway, cause the teacher just overedits everything.
I'm gonna delete it now cus I can now edit it at home, thanks x

Good luck with it. ^_^

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