20-11-2009, 06:01 AM
Okay so I have here a poem that I have written
I don`t know if they`re the best so I am looking for your opinion
if you have any suggestions, please comment and I`ll fix them
there is never a moment when I see the sun set
my house is illuminated by the rays of the sun
I set out in my adventure to find the meaning of love
never has this great fervor ever come to me
but alas, I have met my match, you have defeated me
the defeat was the power of love
you enchant me with your eyes and ways of speaking
don`t you have a weakness where I can strike my love
nothing seems to penetrate your tender heart
as the sun finally sets on the yellow and orange sky
I see you from miles away shining like a pearl
your site enchants me again and brings dreams
lovely is your eyes, mouth, body, and soul
don`t you have an imperfection where I can strike?
nothing seems to mess you up in your ways
I see the mountains change color every sunset
the harmonious songs pass by me like a spell
the memory of you is still in my mind
when will you stop bewitching me
when will you stop loving me
I ask for you stop before its too late
as my heart belongs to another
I don`t know if they`re the best so I am looking for your opinion
if you have any suggestions, please comment and I`ll fix them
there is never a moment when I see the sun set
my house is illuminated by the rays of the sun
I set out in my adventure to find the meaning of love
never has this great fervor ever come to me
but alas, I have met my match, you have defeated me
the defeat was the power of love
you enchant me with your eyes and ways of speaking
don`t you have a weakness where I can strike my love
nothing seems to penetrate your tender heart
as the sun finally sets on the yellow and orange sky
I see you from miles away shining like a pearl
your site enchants me again and brings dreams
lovely is your eyes, mouth, body, and soul
don`t you have an imperfection where I can strike?
nothing seems to mess you up in your ways
I see the mountains change color every sunset
the harmonious songs pass by me like a spell
the memory of you is still in my mind
when will you stop bewitching me
when will you stop loving me
I ask for you stop before its too late
as my heart belongs to another